Posted by: rcwriter | December 19, 2008

Fiction Friday


Guess what?? Today I’m hosting Fiction Friday. If you want to participate, just add your link to Mr. Linky below, and don’t forget to check out all the great stories.

This week’s story is another oldy. I’ve been swamped with a new project that I haven’t had any time to create something new. One of my New Year’s resolutions is to create some new stories. For now, enjoy this story.

The Calling

A crumpled, dirty tissue was pressed to Marisol’s lips. Her head was swimming and her stomach churning as the jeep she was riding in navigated the pothole and dip ridden dirt trail the locals referred to as a road. She thought the contents of her insides would be released any minute as the jeep hit another rut and almost tossed her out. Tears filled her eyes as the taste of bile burned her throat. Why, oh, why had her daughter moved here?

Once steady, she gripped the roll bar and pulled herself forward, “Is it much further?” she yelled over the droning engine.

The robust driver forced the stick shift into second, and called over his shoulder, “A couple of more miles.”

Marisol’s eyes rolled in rhythm with her stomach; she wasn’t sure how much more she could take. She had only been in this vehicle for a couple of hours, but she had been traveling through equatorial South America for almost a day. Her skin was sticky with sweat which facilitated the Columbian dust, dirt and grime in clinging to her body and matting her hair to her head. As she wiped a fat drop of sweat from her eyebrow she wondered why Sarah and John had picked this isolated part of the world to minister. Her mind recalled the last face to face conversation she’d had with Sarah.

*****

“But, mama, these are the people who need us the most,” a bright-eyed Sarah explained with a broad smile. “Don’t you want to see others come to know Jesus?”

Pulling baby Annabeth closer to her chest, Marisol replied with a scowl, “I don’t see why you can’t do that missionary thing closer to home. Why can’t John just go be pastor of a church?”

Sarah let out a loud breath, “He will be. He’ll be starting a church for this people group in Columbia.”

“People group, humph,” Marisol huffed, “There are plenty of people groups here in the states that need to be reached, but you have to go to a God forsaken place where I need a passport and vaccinations to get in.”

Gritting her teeth Sarah replied, “We’re going because that’s where God has called us to go.”

The ladies fell silent for a moment. They both stared at little Annabeth as Marisol clutched her to her bosom.

After several minutes, Sarah broke the silence. She caressed the tuft of down on her baby’s head. In a hushed tone she said, “I know you’re going to miss the baby, but you can come and visit anytime. There’s also internet in the neighboring village. We can e-mail each other, and I’ll send you pictures as often as I can.”

Tears filled Marisol’s eyes. With her bottom lip quivering, she answered, “Annabeth isn’t my only baby I’ll miss.”

*****

The jeep came to a screeching halt. Marisol looked around, but no village could be seen. They were in a small clearing surrounded by trees; a Spanish hymn could be heard wafting on the breeze. “Where are we?” she asked.

“Sarah told me to bring you here. Their church is having a special service at the lake.”

Still feeling a bit inconvenienced, but grateful to be out of the rocking jeep, Marisol followed the driver down a well worn foot path through the trees in the direction of the singing. She ducked under a tree branch and stepped into a breath taking view. A still lake that seemed to be covered in glass cast a perfect reflection of the trees encircling the small body of water. She looked down the hill and past the crowd. Not far off shore, John was standing with two dozen dark skinned, smiling people. Sarah spotted her mother. She grabbed up Annabeth and made her way through the throng of people. “Mama, you made it,” she cried, embracing her mother.

Tears filled Marisol’s eyes as she took a jabbering Annabeth from Sarah’s arms. Looking around, she asked, “What’s all this?”

Full of excitement, Sarah, answered, “This is our baptism service. Look at all the new believers.”

Casting her gaze back to the lake Marisol understood Sarah and John’s calling.

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Responses

  1. Love the dynamics of this story, was very easy to read…the message was outstanding. It blessed me!

  2. Well done! Thanks for sharing it.

  3. Excellent piece (I believe I remember it from elsewhere!). Great descriptions.

  4. This is really good, you are a talented writer. A lot of our Christian life is truly about the sacrifices we make in so many ways.

  5. Thank you for this story. I appreicate the girl’s courage to go and do what God had told her to do, despite her mother’s reservations. That is a thing that many missionaries face.

  6. This shows the big sacrifice that the parents offer when their grown children serve the Lord as missionaries.

    It’s hard enough to see them grow up and leave. It takes faith to send them across the world. It takes a sacrifice, not seeing their granchildren, not knowing if or when they will come back.

    I’m so thankful for the conveniences of emails and satellite phone connections in this time. Thank you for writing this.

  7. Wonderful! Love the way you end this story with the crowd waiting to be baptised. What better way to show why they’re there!


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